Sunday, January 8, 2012

How do you like the beginning of my script so far called - The in's room?

I liked it except the Batman stuff at the end. You should get rid of the part where Donnie's thinking "I gotta drop a load." That's too gross. Just have him go walk around because he's nervous. His mind could think that he needs fresh air and so he goes behind the building and paces.

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